1G3 English Paper 1
Personal Recount
Revision
Today's objective — ContentAsk relevant questions to identify what is missing in the story plot — then rewrite the paragraph marked ▲ using relevant details.
👁 Marker Lens→? Ask questions→✍ Answer them→✓ Check
Recap of the Personal Recount question
Always analyse the question first.
Write about a time when you faced a major change in your life. How did you cope with it?
Part 1A major changeOrientation → Rising Action → Climax
The event itself, told in time order.
Part 2How you copedFalling Action → Resolution
To cope = the steps you took to get through it.
- didthe actions you took, one after another
- thoughtwhat went through your mind
- feltand how that feeling changed
In most of your recounts —
Part 1 was addressed with some development. Usually the climax was not well developed.
Part 2 not addressed — did not show how you coped with the change.
→ Band 2–3 for Content
Part 1 was addressed with some development. Usually the climax was not well developed.
Part 2 not addressed — did not show how you coped with the change.
→ Band 2–3 for Content
Worked example
Moving out of Bukit Merah
Question 2 Write about a time when you faced a major change in your life. How did you cope with it?
1OFor as long as I could remember, I had lived in the same four-room flat in Bukit Merah. I knew which lift was always slow and which uncle at the coffee shop would wave at me every morning. My best friend lived three floors below, and most evenings we played football at the void deck until our mothers called us up for dinner. I had never once thought about living anywhere else.
2RAOne evening in June, my parents called me into the living room and told me to sit down. My father explained that he had been posted to a new office in the north and that we would be moving before the new school year began. I would have to change schools as well. I argued that I could take the MRT, that the distance did not matter, but my mother only shook her head. For the next few days I barely spoke to either of them.
3COn the morning we moved, I walked through the empty flat one last time. Without our furniture, every step echoed strangely and the living room looked far smaller than I remembered. I stood in my bedroom and ran my hand along the pencil marks on the wall where my father had measured my height each year. Downstairs, my best friend was waiting by the lift. Neither of us knew what to say. When the lorry finally pulled away, I turned round in my seat and watched the block grow smaller until the trees blocked it completely.
4FAThe first few weeks in the new flat were difficult. I did not know anyone in my class and I missed my old friends. I felt lonely whenever I walked home by myself. After some time, things became better and I started to feel more settled.
5RLooking back, I am glad I did not give up in those first few weeks. I still miss the void deck, and I still text my old friends at night. Last month a new boy sat alone at recess, and I knew exactly how that felt, so I asked him to join us. Moving taught me to be kind to people who are still finding their way.
Your worksheet
Label each paragraph's stage.
ORACFAR
Read it as the marker
- Which paragraph left you confused?
- What is missing in the story?
✍ Writer View
You were there.
You remember all of it — what you did, who you talked to, how long it took, what finally helped.
It is all in your headSame story.
Two viewpoints.
Remember this
Write down the actions, thoughts and feelings. Your marker cannot see them.
👁 Marker Lens
Your marker was not there.
All your marker gets is the words you actually wrote down.
If you did not write it, it did not happen — and your marker will not understandSame writing, now labelled
What does each paragraph do?
1Osets up the life he hadFor as long as I could remember, I had lived in the same four-room flat in Bukit Merah. I knew which lift was always slow and which uncle at the coffee shop would wave at me every morning. My best friend lived three floors below, and most evenings we played football at the void deck until our mothers called us up for dinner. I had never once thought about living anywhere else.
2RAthe news, and how he took itOne evening in June, my parents called me into the living room and told me to sit down. My father explained that he had been posted to a new office in the north and that we would be moving before the new school year began. I would have to change schools as well. I argued that I could take the MRT, that the distance did not matter, but my mother only shook her head. For the next few days I barely spoke to either of them.
3Cthe last morning in the flatOn the morning we moved, I walked through the empty flat one last time. Without our furniture, every step echoed strangely and the living room looked far smaller than I remembered. I stood in my bedroom and ran my hand along the pencil marks on the wall where my father had measured my height each year. Downstairs, my best friend was waiting by the lift. Neither of us knew what to say. When the lorry finally pulled away, I turned round in my seat and watched the block grow smaller until the trees blocked it completely.
4FA? he changes, but we do not know why or howThe first few weeks in the new flat were difficult. I did not know anyone in my class and I missed my old friends. I felt lonely whenever I walked home by myself. After some time, things became better and I started to feel more settled.
5Rwhat he understands nowLooking back, I am glad I did not give up in those first few weeks. I still miss the void deck, and I still text my old friends at night. Last month a new boy sat alone at recess, and I knew exactly how that felt, so I asked him to join us. Moving taught me to be kind to people who are still finding their way.
Concept map
Plot Mountain
You are the marker now
You have never read this story before.
Which part confuses you? Which part leaves you with a question?
Falling Action, sentence by sentence
Read like a marker
- The first few weeks in the new flat were difficult.
- I did not know anyone in my class and I missed my old friends.
- I felt lonely whenever I walked home by myself.
- After some time, things became better and I started to feel more settled.
Teacher types live
What is missing?
Where we are
Falling Action
Falling Action = show what you did after the big moment, step by step, and how things changed.
Nothing removed — the whole paragraph
The jump is visible
- The first few weeks in the new flat were difficult.
- I did not know anyone in my class and I missed my old friends.
- I felt lonely whenever I walked home by myself.
- ?
- After some time, things became better and I started to feel more settled.
FELT LONELY→?→FELT SETTLED
The rule
Development means you must show Actions, Thoughts, Feelings.
Our questions point here
Falling Action
Falling Action = show what you did after the big moment, step by step, and how things changed.
The problem
▲ The Falling Action is underdeveloped.
The class asked
What do we still not know?
CONTENT GAP
The new sentences go here
Original paragraph
- The first few weeks in the new flat were difficult.
- I did not know anyone in my class and I missed my old friends.
- I felt lonely whenever I walked home by myself.
- ▼ NEW SENTENCES GO HERE ▼
- After some time, things became better and I started to feel more settled.
Keep the gap visible
Falling Action
Falling Action = show what you did after the big moment, step by step, and how things changed.
How we do it
Answer the questions with actions, thoughts and feelings, step by step.
Question → new detail
Build the paragraph
Type only the new sentences that fill the gap
Version 1 — the gap is filled
Click any underlined word
underlined — could be sharperdotted — could be cut
🍉 Stretch — the Language mark
Improve the vocabulary
1 · Vivid verbswalked → trudged, dragged myself
2 · Adjectives and adverbsthe empty corridor · walked slowly
3 · Sensory languagewhat you saw, heard, smelt
4 · Dialogue“Want to join us?” someone asked.
Improve the words. Do not add new events.
Version 2 — same content, better words
Upgrade it live
Revised paragraph
Now the reader can follow
originalwhat we added
Return to the map
Falling Action
the shape before
Falling Action = show what you did after the big moment, step by step, and how things changed.
BEFOREAddressed — not developed.
The reader is dropped from “lonely” to “settled”.
The reader is dropped from “lonely” to “settled”.
AFTERAddressed and developed in detail.
The reader can follow how it changed.
The reader can follow how it changed.
Questions answered
Marker Lens
Remember this
Development = adding the missing actions, thoughts and feelings, step by step.
Before you try it on your own writing
This is what we just did.
Step 1👁 Marker LensWe read the recount as someone who was not there.
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Step 2? Ask questionsWe asked questions about the plot.
What details were missing? What did we not know about his thoughts and feelings?
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Step 3✍ Answer themAnswering those questions develops the Falling Action.
Development = adding the missing actions, thoughts and feelings, step by step, so the reader has enough details to understand your story well.
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Step 4✓ CheckCan the marker now follow what happened in the story?
Today’s objective — ContentAsk relevant questions to identify what is missing in the story plot — then rewrite the paragraph marked ▲ using relevant details.